Dear DiaLog,
I guess I haven’t written in a while. I’ve
been completing Liv’s ‘Get Over Tom
Quick Scheme’ for the past nine days, which I guess brings us to “Day 10: Blind
date set up by Liv *NOT HAPPENING Sing *insert good ‘I’m over you’ song
here* really, really loudly’.
This song, I’ve decided is none other than
Taylor Swift’s ‘You Belong with Me’. But maybe don’t tell Liv… it’s not exactly
an ‘I’m over you song’…
So it’s been a while huh? A lot has been
going on… I mean, remember I told you that Benjamin Preston was coming over for
dinner (and Mum was making pie?) – well that was 5 days ago. Allow me to
tell you the story:
He was coming at 6 for (as Mum calls it), ‘coffee and cake’. At about 5:30pm Mum had changed about 5 times, Terri had changed 20 times and Dad was still in his pyjamas. Bradley was picking up Abigail from her flute lesson and they were arriving at quarter to 6 (which of course they did… practically perfect in every way) and at five minutes to 6, Terri was crying about her hair when there was a knock at the door. Of course this was cunningly covered up when she told him she had ‘got something in her eye’, to which he responded by trying to assist her in removing an invisible eyelash.
He was coming at 6 for (as Mum calls it), ‘coffee and cake’. At about 5:30pm Mum had changed about 5 times, Terri had changed 20 times and Dad was still in his pyjamas. Bradley was picking up Abigail from her flute lesson and they were arriving at quarter to 6 (which of course they did… practically perfect in every way) and at five minutes to 6, Terri was crying about her hair when there was a knock at the door. Of course this was cunningly covered up when she told him she had ‘got something in her eye’, to which he responded by trying to assist her in removing an invisible eyelash.
Ben shook hands with Dad… “Firm handshake.
Good man.”
Mum kissed his cheek (I later saw him wipe off her plum coloured lipstick in the hall mirror about a minute later) and Bradley and Abigail smiled politely… as they do… and welcomed him to our house.
Mum kissed his cheek (I later saw him wipe off her plum coloured lipstick in the hall mirror about a minute later) and Bradley and Abigail smiled politely… as they do… and welcomed him to our house.
The poor guy. 3 minutes in and he already
looked like he wanted to run.
The rest of the night was much the same.
Mum ‘casually’ put on some Michael Bublé during dinner, lit about 20 candles
(the smoke alarm when off twice…) and covered up the burnt apple pie by
covering it with pre-whipped, canned cream. And furthermore, a pile of canned apples.
Gross.
As for Tom? Well, I’m trying to forget him.
Him and Kia are subtle but obvious – I can’t believe I didn’t notice it before.
Anyway, I’ll keep you posted.
This is Allie Fisher saying seeya… and PLEASE
don’t try my Mum’s apple pie recipe. Seriously… disgusting.
LOVE!
Allie
Allie
Hey person who writes as Allie! I'm the person who writes as Manny lol. I found your blog doing a fiction blog search and of course I had to read and comment. Us fictional bloggers have got to stick together!!
ReplyDelete...or something like that. Ish.
Anyway, just wanted to let you know I've read and enjoyed and I'm in love with your title. Fantastic. If you wouldn't mind a bit of constructive criticism (feel free to ignore), you're title makes it seem like you're going someplace very specific with your story. Like you've got a plan or something you're going to get to (if that makes any sense). Your "about" section on the other hand, in my personal opinion, feels a little aimless. Like the title promises structure and the summary doesn't. I dunno if that makes any sense. Considering my about section isn't even filled out yet I'm not really one to talk lol.
Anyway, good luck with the rest of your posts! I'll be reading ;)
Hi!
ReplyDeleteIt's lovely to get some feedback about my writing. I haven't written Allie for a little while, so thanks for encouraging me. I'll be writing again soon!
When I started writing Allie, I had an idea and I just ran with it, so things like the 'about' section are definitely not up to scratch. I'd love to re-do the site at some point and improve things like that.
I hope you enjoy fiction-blogging! It's heaps of fun. Feel free to send a link to your blog, I'd love to read it.
Thanks,
Allie's Imaginer